lamont
Contributor
I'm going to say I thought it was fine as a sales-pitch video, and I'd resist the urge to tweak it too much. It does fine addressing the 'Why'.
I think if you're going to do a technique video (the 'How') it needs to be separate, and you need to cover all the different mistakes (fin tips too up, head down, knees bent, etc), and incorporate all the things Hallmac mentioned.
I kind of like that you included a lot of shots of the diver just swimming around at the end. I mostly skipped over that, and I'm pretty sure that most experienced divers just skipped over it, but I'll bet some pre-fundies students and folks that don't have any access to DIR divers will wind up watching that nearly obsessively frame-by-frame... =) By putting it at the end like that you give the viewer a choice as to how ADD they happen to feel...
I 'got' what you were trying to get across, and thought it worked for that. I'd shoot a different video before messing with that one too much (although +1 on the sound levels).
I think if you're going to do a technique video (the 'How') it needs to be separate, and you need to cover all the different mistakes (fin tips too up, head down, knees bent, etc), and incorporate all the things Hallmac mentioned.
I kind of like that you included a lot of shots of the diver just swimming around at the end. I mostly skipped over that, and I'm pretty sure that most experienced divers just skipped over it, but I'll bet some pre-fundies students and folks that don't have any access to DIR divers will wind up watching that nearly obsessively frame-by-frame... =) By putting it at the end like that you give the viewer a choice as to how ADD they happen to feel...
I 'got' what you were trying to get across, and thought it worked for that. I'd shoot a different video before messing with that one too much (although +1 on the sound levels).