Looking much cleaner now. I'm curious why you have 4 straight D rings. Usually you just want the 2 bent style D-rings, like you have listed, and one straight D-ring to have on your left side. Optional (but not DIR usually) a second straight D-ring on your right side. But you have 2 more listed (total 4). Crotch straps usually already have 2 pre-installed. Keep the 6 sliders though, if you decide to not use the slide bars then you will have enough spare sliders to anchor the webbing.
I don't see a single tank adapter in your list (STA), but you did add a bolt kit suitable for an STA. I'm not used to imperial units, but have a look if you can get a shorter kit if you don't plan to use one, so its not digging on your back. It might be ok though, 3/4" just means nothing to me and I'm too lazy to google the conversion
If you don't plan to make your own rubber bands from bike tubes, then I'd get another pack of rubber bands to save on shipping. They're reasonably durable, but annoying when they eventually snap. Won't hurt to have spares.